Peer Review for Stephanie Blough

Peer Review Guidelines for Synthesis

1. Does the introduction give you enough background to understand the topic and the controversy? Does it provide some hints about how the sources are organized? Offer your suggestions for improving the introduction? I think your introduction is great. You give good background info. Just fix minor grammar errors and clear up fourth sentence
2.  How many sources are used? 7
3.  Does the writer provide succinct and clear summary of the sources and connect the summary to the problem? yes
4.    Do you see a logical transition from one source to the other? How many sources are used in each paragraph?  yes; there is a logical transition. there are about 2-3 sources in each paragraph
5.   Does the writer incorporate the quotes with her/his own writing in an effective manner and cite the sources correctly? Are there places where the sources seem to take the writer off-track?
• I think that some quotes could be explained more clearly
• most are cited correctly
• I feel like the third paragraph gets off track
6.     Does the writer make succinct and precise conclusion based on the review? Does the conclusion have a clear hypothesis or research question(s)? Is the hypothesis/research question based on the review? yes
7.   Does each paragraph adhere to a single main idea? Note any paragraphs that seem to have multiple topics competing for attention.
• second paragraph: your topic sentence is different from the rest -- make a connection between the tests and ADI
• third paragraph: maybe spend less time on BMI and obesity
8.  Are paragraphs connected with transitions?  Identify any places where transitions between paragraphs can be improved. good transitions
9.  Do paragraphs make good use of repetition of key ideas?  Note any places where the writer might improve coherence by repeating a key term or synonym. yes
10.  Is the overall order of paragraphs in the paper logical? yes
11. Does the writer include a correctly documented works cited page? yes
12. What are the four most significant changes the writer could make to improve this paper?
• explain quotes better
• put periods in correct places
• clear up few confusing sentences
• fix grammar mistakes